RE: Mom also cries [ENG][ESP]
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hello @nathy33 you share with us a story of two mothers of special needs children who meet in a clinic while their children are receiving treatment. You share what this feels like for parents in this situation and how they can act as a support network for each other. From the writing style, this piece felt like a true story. Can you confirm whether it was fiction as tagged,or a creative non-fiction? And in reviewing your comments to other authors, I noticed an anomaly. You recently wrote the identical comment on stories written by both nancybriti1 and popurri. Could you clarify why this was done please. We ask for your response because comment respinning is not something that is viewed well by The Ink Well, and you usually engage quite well with others. Thank you, The Ink Well team.
Greetings, first of all I want to clarify that the story "Mom also cries" is fiction, although as you comment it has many elements that make it seem real, when I decided to write it thinking about the theme of encouragement, if mothers in itself we need encouragement because it is not easy to do the housework, the attention that children require to eat, play, learn, etc, I imagined how would be the life of a mother with a child with special needs, definitely need support, and what better with someone who understood her because she lives a similar situation. I welcome any suggestions and observations.
Regarding the comment, sincerely I made a mistake and I apologize in advance, my mistake was not reviewing the comment before sending it, really the comment was for the publication of popurri, when I read the story of nancybriti1 I liked it a lot and I identified and connected with her, because I like baseball and I explained in my comment what was happening in my case, as I speak Spanish I use the translator DeepL, but when I translated and copied, I kept what I had written to popurri in the clipboard and it was what was pasted, with the rush of time, I did not realize and I repeated the comment, after you write I got worried and I started to check and I still have the message to nancybriti1, I thought about editing but the error is already evident, so I will send the correct comment and I will apologize to her too.
Lesson to be learned: I must always review the writings before sending; I appreciate the value you give to the publications, the interaction between users and the dedication and time you take to analyze each publication, because it enriches our writings and in turn helps us to improve. I hope I have clarified the situation and once again thank you.
Thank you for your response @nathy33 and thank you for clarifying the genesis of your story and the reason for the duplicated story comments. That makes complete sense to me. I was drawn into your story, and your writing of something so intense and personal, in the first person, made it feel so real. I am a parent of a special needs child myself so I could relate. This story was told with tenderness and compassion. There are incredible moments of joy that a parent experiences with each progressive step in their journey with their child. And it is a journey as much for the parent as the child. It is an exhausting journey filled with anxiety and despair, love and hope. I would have loved to have seen more of the impacts of the child's challenges as experienced through the eyes of the child and the mother. More show than tell. I think it would have made the ending more impactfull than it already was. Some simple examples: Perhaps some early dialogue between mother and son and the use of descriptive language around sensations viz. the touch of his skin against hers, her child's natural scent, what she saw in him, the sound of his unsteady voice and frustration as the letters were mashed together in frustration, the salty tears that ran down her face... ways to show feelings like connection, love, sadness, and frustration. Allow me to share a resource from The Ink Well Show don't Tell
Thank you for writing in The Ink Well. I look forward to your next story :-)
Guaoo I did not expect such a beautiful comment, it touched my heart, I hope to follow the suggestions received, each time I enrich the writing, eager to use these literary resources. I appreciate that you have shared that personal aspect of your life, and the description you make of the relationship mother son, I identify a lot. Sublime.