Angel's Diary
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Angel's Diary
Angel was a talented musician. She lived with her single mother and grandfather. She was the only child of her parents. She lost her father at a very young age due to a car crash after that day, Her mother became traumatised.
Angel was a very popular student because of her singing talent, she won so many awards for her school and got her family a good reputation. She never feels lonely or fatherless because of her grandfather who she normally calls dad. She loves her grandpa and never keeps anything from him.
Angel had a friend in school named Raymond, who was secretly crushing on her. But a certain day came, Raymond expressed his love for her and after some serious time of thinking she accepted because she was close to him.
Raymond and Angel had much in common which made them close and were awarded best student couples of the year which made them envied by everyone.
Angel was invited to participate in a universal talent competition which has been her dream. She was given four months to prepare herself, she was so glad to see her dream come to reality.
Angel told her family, school, and boyfriend about it. Raymond was not happy because he felt she would mingle with another male participating and fall in love with one of them and neglect him. So he began to give him some reason why she didn't go but she was adamant and told him how she had dreams of being a participant Raymond had to agree forcefully.
She began her practice with the help of her music teacher, she was doing great each time when she practiced. Three months passed by, and she was so happy as she kept on ticking on her calendar. Finally, it's the fourth month. Unfortunately, her grandfather had a heart attack that was so severe that landed in the city hospital. Angel was so scared, depressed, and heartbroken, and was thinking she would lose her dad for the second time in her life. She was feeling discouraged because her courage depended on her grandfather's father's ability to recover quickly. She needed words of comfort from somebody who could encourage her or lighten up her courage before leaving for the competition the next morning.
She drove herself to Raymond's apartment to find out if he can be of help and also to bid him goodbye!!!. On getting to his place she saw Raymond and one of his sassy classmates Annabel having a nice and cool time together “chilling”. She felt heartbroken and asked him to give a reasonable explanation for what was happening. Not feeling remorseful for what he has done or is busy doing. He told her that since she is going, for now, he is busy planning how he will start a new relationship. With all these misfortunes, she felt a sword piercing into her bone marrow, and at the same, she felt her heart being shattered into tiny pieces. The words kept repeating in her head she felt like letting out a big and wild scream!!! But she had no other option than to hold her head up high and profusely walked out like a mad woman who is being chased. She ran into her car looking sad and tired of life.
She cried her eyes out as she drove through the narrow road. With every second passing, she was feeling more discouraged, on reaching home, she packed her luggage and left for the competition.
She found the man who was going to pick her up for the competition and they left.
It was the presentation day, all the other participants did justice to their presentation and the audience was pleased with their performances. Finally, it was Angel's turn, many individuals in the audience knew her capability before now so they knew she would kill the show. She got on stage to sing but as she began to sing, her intonation and pitch were rising and falling; the rhythm was not melodious as usual. Her voice was cracking and tears began rolling down from her eyes in despair and she ran down from the stage and the audience didn't hesitate to scream Boo!!! Boo!!!. Boo!!!. Different sound of Boo was heard from different angles at the arena. Now she knew that all hope was lost but she felt a hand placed on her shoulder and she turned up to look, it was the host of the program Mr. Ahmed she was trembling in fear tremendously because she thought she would be scolded by Mr. Ahmed. But fortunately, he grabbed her hand and pulled her up back to the stage, and gave her motivating and encouraging words from his heart and how to conquer stage fright.
She regained her courage and completely did perfect justice to her presentation. Before she knew it she was done with her presentation and the crowds started yelling out her name and throwing flowers and roses at her. At this rate of jubilation, she felt she was currently at the top of the world.
Not too long after, the draw of the results was ready. The judge announced the results of the other contestants and Angel was eagerly waiting for her. Her results were announced, the audience stood up and thunderous applause showered upon her. She came first and her joy knew no bounds she majestically walked up to the stage to collect her awards. She was honoured that she didn't disgrace her grandfather, her family, and her school.
She came back home with her handful of prizes and awards which will change her life forever.
Raymond came back and pleaded for mercy but Angel saw that going back to him was a waste of time. So Angel started her music career with different brand sponsors and influential ambassadors and also began to make a profit which she used to save her grandfather's life and became a popular musician with a good reputation.
Raymond regretted his actions and became a loser at last.
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The word Boo!!! Was used with concrete alacrity.
The write-up is fantastic and I really like the fact that
"Angel was not willing to accept Raymond's plea".
This could be a nice way to present a good write-up
Thank you very much sir. And also stopping by to make a comment
Wow....what an interesting way to use the word "Boo". Very creative. Raymond obviously let go of the one who would have surely not let go of him and am glad angel didn't take him back.
Yeah it was really a grave mistake on Raymond's part
Raymond deserved what he got. He must live with the consequences of his actions.
He should have been there with her, it's so sad he chose to abandon her when she needed him.
Yeah
He really deserved it
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I just read your introductory post and am impressed by your references. Both @cool08 and @mrenglish are respected writers in this community. With this story, you represent them well.
The conflict between Angel and Raymond is very believable. Often, when someone moves forward in life, friends may feel threatened. They may feel they are being 'left behind'. Angel's stage fright is believably evoked in the story. Any one of us who has performed on stage can relate to that.
Your use of the prompt is ingenious. Great first story. Thank you for sharing this with us. One aspect of writing for the Inkwell that is important is engagement. Look around at other stories writers have offered this week. Read them and comment. This will help them and will also help you to develop your skills.
Keep writing :)
Wow... Thanks @agmoore . He is is good writer and he is going to be good whiie here....
Welcome to the Inkwell, @officialvictor. You begin your participation in this community with a well-developed story. You have a strong narrative arc and strong character development. 'Boo' as an indication of disapproval: great idea.
Your protagonist experiences more than one conflict. She must go on stage and perform. She must handle her relationship with Raymond. And, she must deal with her grandfather's illness. In each case, your resolution is sensible.
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This is your first write?? You were born for this. You know your way around this prompt and the way you use it is nothing short of brilliance.
It is like every of us who have such moment of hteir life, important and have to do that step like to perform, to know that we are ready but also to have a bit of hesitation. It is important to grab a chance and just to try our strengh. Well written story!
Yeah
Well said