Dilusional dream
Nancy sat on the sofa watching movies with her two beautiful children. Mia and Leo. They giggled as the scene went on. Nancy remembered something as she exited down to the kitchen.
"Who is up for popcorn"
"Yeaaaah" they cheered in unison as they both resumed back to the tv show. As the time proceed, leo fell asleep followed by Mia. Nancy carried both inside and tucked them before she turned off the light down to the sitting room.
She checked the time, 10:20 pm, her husband wasn't back. What could be wrong? She thought to herself picking up her phone to dial his number.
"Hey babe, what is keeping you?she asked amidst her pounding chest, at least he picked up and knew he was alright.
"I'm stuck up in traffic, I will shortly be home" he replied evenly.
"Ok, I will be waiting for you" before the phone goes dead. Nancy watched some comedy movies as she chuckled at every scene, marching on her popcorn. She didn't know how much time had gone till the movie came to an end. She checked the time, past midnight but her husband wasn't home. She began to panic when she dialed his number it wasn't going through.
Her sense of urgency arose, her heart was pounding out of her chest. So many thoughts running down her head as she paces from one corner of the sitting room to the other. Sleep was far fetched from her. A knock sounded on the door, jotting her from her thoughts.
"It could be him" she mumbled from the sitting room down the hallway to get the door. Her hope was high to scold her husband, he got her worried.
She gently opened the door but was met by two giant men who were taller than her. In a tuxedo black suit on her doorway. Their mean face sends shivers down her spine, who were these men and what are they looking for at her doorway? Questions she couldn't answer as she opened her mouth to talk, the men walked past her taking advantage of her house.
"Hey, who are you and what are you looking for? She ran behind them but was graced with silence.
The men settled in the sitting room as she looked up at them, she looked small compared to their size.
"Someone should fucking answer me, what are you doing in my house?" She got her confidence but it went down to zero as one of the men clutched out a gun from his pocket. Her adrenaline was pumping through her veins as her heart was pounding continuously under her rib cage.
"Go get them" one of the guys motioned to the other one, she screamed.
" No no" the man went upstairs down to the children's room to pick them up. They were fast asleep as he laid them on his shoulder coming down the stairs.
"No no no, where are you taking my kids?" she kept screaming amidst the gun that was tucked on her forehead.
"You're quite noisy," the man in front of him said, bringing out a black cloth to tie her mouth up leading them both outside to a black SUV.
Nancy was slowly losing her mind, as she made a sound in-between the rap clothes in-between her mouth. As they got to the car, she was hit with the back of the gun as she passed out. She was woken up by the pour of water over her body. She shivered taking in the environment, everywhere was dead silent, it wasn't familiar, her hands and legs were tied up. She became alert, she was in danger as she remembered what happened earlier. She shifted on the chairs she was tied to. Mumbled something from her mouth but it wasn't clear enough as her mouth was tied up.
She heard footsteps approaching from a distance as her senses were alert, a tall man walked in front of her but she couldn't recognize him, it wasn't the men who took them earlier.
"Bring them forward" he commanded,his tone full of authority as it sent shivers down her spine. What is he talking about? Nancy widened her eyes as she heard footsteps from a far end and within a few minutes it was near and the person she saw in front of her was her two adorable children in front of a man in a tuxedo suit. She shifted in the chair trying to break loose but the ropes she was tied onto were too strong. Hot tears streamed down her cheek.
She kept screaming in between her tied up mouth.
"You see, these two adorable kids of yours will be gone within a few minutes, choose who goes first" he said with a smirk on his face. She was sure he was enjoying the drama playing in front of him.
The man in front of her sent a message to his men, she couldn't understand what he signalled to them but she continuously kept shaking on her seat and making mumbling noises in-between those tired clothes.
A cubic container was brought forward, it was full of water, the glass was transparent, her both children were ducked into it.
"No no" she screamed out loud, sitting up.
"Hey babe, are you ok?" She looked at her husband who was sitting close to her,his face was full of concern.
"It was so real" she was panting heavily, her husband came closer trying to calm her down.
"Babe, calm down it was just a dream" she couldn't hold back as tears streamed down her cheek, remembering her dream. She couldn't lose her children in such a painful situation. The feeling of urgency crossed her mind as she rushed to their room, her husband racing behind her calling her name but she ignored till she reached their room.
"Good morning mummy" Leo greeted rubbing his eyes in-between yarns as she kissed his forehead, putting him in a hug. She woke Mia up who was raising herself to see her mother and her Dad in their room.
"Mummy are you ok, you are crying" she asked but was graced with a kiss on her forehead.
"Babe you don't need to be paranoid, it was just a dream"
"It felt so real" she mumbled, circling a hug with her children.
"We have to move out of here" she looked at her husband's face taking in his reaction.
"What? Just because of a fussy dream.."
"It's not just a dream, I can feel something is wrong somewhere" her husband raised a hand to his head pacing from one corner to the other.
"We will figure it out"
Hello @jeclyn60,
We caution our writers not to use 'it was just a dream' as a device in their stories. While you place the dream in the context of a narrative, still you string the reader along as though something is actually happening. Please read our tip on this subject here. Your idea is good, but drawing the reader in as though the action is real--that is not the best approach to crafting a story.
Your writing is engaging and the story, if it had been 'real' (and not a dream), is interesting. Another aspect of the story in which caution should be exercised: We don't welcome stories in which children are injured. This story comes close to and even crosses that line.
Thank you for sharing this with us. You have a vivid imagination and a knack for sharing what you imagine with readers.
Thank you for the correction.