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“I just need you to understand that we can’t be happy all the time.”
“But I am.”
Lucy glared at the gentleman’s response.
“Patrick. Stop. There is no possible way that you can be happy all the time and if there is, we are two different people. I don’t see life like you do.” Lucy kicks off her heels.
Patrick follows his girlfriend as she navigates their apartment. This already felt like an argument when it shouldn’t be.
“But why would you want to be sad all the time?” He asked
Lucy glanced at him when they entered their bedroom. Patrick had stopped at the doorway and watched her take off her dinner gown. He had no time to properly appreciate the view because she was jerking on her flannel pajamas the next minute.
“I am not sad all the time. I’m realistic.”
“Babe, you just said a few minutes ago that the thought of summer was depressing.”
“And it is. I hate heat and I hate flowers more.” Lucy replied monotonously
Patrick laughed, slowly peeling off his suit jacket as he walked in to join her. She plumped on the bed, laying on her back; watching him undress.
“But you took flowers I bought you.”
“That is because I did not want to shoo you away so early. Fact, I threw them in the garbage the moment you walked out the door.”
Patrick laughs, “I bet you did. You have a knack for annoying me.”
Lucy tilts her head, “that is not true. If there is anyone annoying in this relationship, it’s you.”
“How?”
“For starters, you think you can help everybody. You always rush to console everyone. It makes me want to puke.”
Patrick was in no way offended by his girlfriend’s crude talk. He was used to it and he knew that was something about her that could never change. She was always brutally honest and never sugar-coated words. It is one of the things he loves about her. She makes communication easy.
“What? I should look the other way then?” He put his hands on his waist.
“Yes. Exactly.”
Patrick shakes his head as he gives her his back to take of his dress shirt and pants; the rustling of fabrics pronounced in the silent room.
“Babe. That is who I am. I can never be comfortable seeing people distressed especially when I can definitely help.
“Yeah. I mean just hug the pain away. Like you did with, what’s her name…Brittany.”
Patrick’s movements halt as he pulls his pants up. Ahhh. He totally forgot how possessive and jealous his girlfriend could be. Brittany was just a co-worker and she seemed to be going through a lot. He’d been a listening ear and gave her a quick hug when Lucy walked in. A laugh escapes him.
“It is not a laughing matter. You better mind where you put your body.” She speaks.
Patrick laughs harder even as he tried to talk, “okay fine. I’m sorry.”
He joins her in bed, pulling her close to cuddle. She’s resisting and it spurs him. She’s always been a fighter.
Her strawberry blonde tickled his neck but he didn’t mind. He enjoyed holding her.
“I promise to be stingy with my hugs, but even if I’m a people person I only have eyes for you.” He promised, kissing her forehead.
“I know. I don’t expect you to change but please, don’t expect me to either.”
“Never. I love my green-eyed she-devil.”
Lucy did not know if he was referring to her jealous streak or the fact that she did in fact possess green eyes. Either way, she loved the hell out of this man.
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What a fun story, @deraaa. You've shown a light onto the intriguing semantics of couples who are play-fighting as they wrestle with their importance in one another's lives. It seems very realistic, and you've captured so much great drama in their dialogue.
Just a suggestion: Consider going through the story and ensuring that it is all told in either present tense or past tense.
Oh... Thank you so much for that observation. I'll work on that... Thank you so much 💕💕💕
I really enjoyed this story, @deraaa. The drama and conversation between two people is always interesting. You did such a nice job of creating a romantic tension! Well done!
I have a few tips for you. The first one is about tense. It's important to decide whether you want to tell your story using present or past tense, and just use one. Here, you've switched between the two. For example, these two lines are just a few paragraphs apart. The first example is written in past tense and the second in present tense.
The second tip is to decide who's story you are telling. As readers, we want to identify with and get into the mind and heart of one of the characters. We mostly experience this story from Patrick's perspective. We see his inner thoughts with nice hints like this one:
And this one:
But at the very end it suddenly switches to Lucy's point of view:
Consider hinting at whose story is being told in the first line or two. This draws in the reader. We instantly want to know more about that person, and how they will deal with the conflict of the story. Then stick with telling the story from the point of view of that character throughout, so at the end, we feel satisfied by getting to know that character.
I hope that's helpful!
Oooooh. Thank you so much. I still have no idea if telling in Present or past tense is better... I'll try these tips. Thank you so much. I really appreciate it.
The chemistry between the two seems to be sparking always with lots of bonding.
But on a good note, Patrick should learn how to be selfish sometimes, being a people's person comes with lots of disadvantages
Yes. He should and there'll always be problems. I'm grateful for the attention you gave my story. Thank you.
I felt as if I had experienced it or would experience it. It is important to always be careful and kind in a relationship, not to offend each other and to communicate in this way. I like the way you talk, it sounds very realistic, like an experience?😁🤗🤗
Experience??? Lol. No
Just from the top of my head. Hehe. Thank your so much for reading
Good story @deraaa. I really liked how you described the relationship between your main characters. And in the end there was no conflict despite the jealousy.
Happy new year and blessings 😊🎄
Happy New Year. Thank you so much
Such a lovely story 😊
Love the dialogue, really showing the way relationships could be.
Although breakfast is real😂😂😂
😂😂😂😂
It is real o. Thank you so much
A fresh story that attracts when reading it. I really liked it, very entertaining to read. Thanks for sharing.
Happy New Year
Happy New year. Thank you very much. I really appreciate you.
In every great story, there's drama.
You've show that in your story and I love it.
Nice one dear.
Much jealousy is seriously not good in a relationship, but needed.
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It is. Thank you so much...
Hehe... This is amazingly funny, they are perfect match for each other.
They are. I really appreciate your comment
☺☺.. Pleasure.